Want to know what really happens behind the pages of a book?
Here’s a sneaky look at how my latest picture book took
shape.
The Idea
The idea for the Fairytale Hairdresser series came about through my sisters. I am one of six girls and we used to play all kinds of
crazy games (often involving dressing up the poor long-suffering dog). One of
our favourite games was hairdressers and we had our own little salon going on
in the family bathroom. I was reminiscing about the sinkfuls of bubbles with my
sisters one day when a thought popped into my head: where do fairy tale
characters go to get their hair done? I immediately thought of the Big Bad Wolf
having his whiskers washed, and a series was born!
The Plot
Cinderella is the second in the series (the first focused on
Rapunzel). Writing within a series is both easier and harder. It’s easier
because you already have the set-up and characters – my main character, Kittie
Lacey is a modern business woman who runs a salon caring for all the hair, beards,
fur and fleece in Fairyland. I had a feel of how Kittie came across, and the
template of her helping a fairy tale character to work with. But in series
writing you have to make sure you develop your story on, and that the book fits
well within past as well as future books. You do also feel the pressure of making
sure the second book is as popular as the first.
The first thing I do with a Fairytale Hairdresser book is to work out which elements of the story I want to keep, which I want to adapt and which I want to ditch. To find which bits of the story resonate the most I ask around for advice - in the case of Cinderella, my children, my nephew and niece and friends' children told me they loved the dressing up and the ball scene and the hunt for Cinderella. Here is my plot scribble for Cinderella:
The first thing I do with a Fairytale Hairdresser book is to work out which elements of the story I want to keep, which I want to adapt and which I want to ditch. To find which bits of the story resonate the most I ask around for advice - in the case of Cinderella, my children, my nephew and niece and friends' children told me they loved the dressing up and the ball scene and the hunt for Cinderella. Here is my plot scribble for Cinderella:
The challenge for me was to tie the story in with hair. My main character had to get in somehow. So, after much playing, I decided to give Cinderella a day job at the salon, and to use the device of a glass hairclip instead of a shoe to help the Prince find her.
The First Draft
Like a lot of authors, I only write part time. I have a day
job and children, so drafts are often scribbled on the tube, at school pick-ups
or in my lunch hour at work. I carry a teeny notebook around with me all
the time so I can write down the truly brilliant ideas (it’s a very teeny
notebook).
The first draft was dashed out as usual on the work commute:
Although I don’t illustrate, I always sketch out spreads in
thumbnails – these help me get a feel for pacing, suspense, page turns and word
count. So, after my teeny notebook stage, I draw thumbnails of the story in a bigger
sketchbook like this:
Then I write and rewrite and write and rewrite, carrying my
draft back and forth to my day job so I can scribble on it:
The Editor
When I have a draft I am happy with I send it off to my
fantastic editor (I love him). He writes back with comments on my draft like this:
My draft:
'It was getting later and later. The moon was high in the
sky.
(Moon with cow jumping over.)
Upstairs Kittie and Cinderella were pinning up the Queen’s
fallen curls.
Now it was nearly midnight.
Downstairs every maiden wanted to dance with the Prince…
Downstairs every maiden wanted to dance with the Prince…
…and he was kept especially busy by the Wicked Step-Sisters,
who grabbed him again and again and twirled him around till he was dizzy.'
Editor comments:
'I
really love the upstairs/downstairs section, and I think Lauren will have great
fun with this – it will make a really striking spread. I wonder, though,
whether we could lose the lines ‘...and he was kept especially busy by the
Wicked Step-Sisters, who grabbed him again and again...’, as it could be shown
in the illustration. It rather breaks up the: upstairs..., downstairs...,
upstairs..., downstairs... Likewise the ‘it was getting later and later’,
‘now it was almost midnight’. The time progression would be implicit in all the
activity, and we could try using little clocks showing the hour getting later
and later'
The real illustrator
Once a next stage draft is agreed, the book goes off to my
amazing illustrator, Lauren Beard, to work her magic. The spread above was
turned into this rough:
Are there arguments?
A lot of people want to know the answer to this. The truth
is – there are disagreements occasionally about what a story should include. It’s part of the process. But it's
hard as a new writer to know whether to stand your ground. The publishers
usually know what they are talking about much more than I do and so I mainly trust
my editor (annoyingly he is most often right). But, if there is something I
think is really important I will try and push my point.
In Cinderella one particular issue arose. I wanted the
Prince to have met Cinderella before the ball and for him to look for her at
the ball. But this was a departure from the original story where the Prince has
to look for her after the ball, using the glass slipper.
So I wrote to my editor and said:
Me:
'I wanted to do a twist on the Cinderella story as I don't
like the way in the original tale the implication is that Cinders needs to dress
up and look beautiful to win her Prince, so much so that the Ugly sisters do
not recognise her when she looks so lovely at the ball. This theme of being
unrecognisable is continued in the rest of the tale, as the Prince needs to
find the girl who fits the shoe, which implies that, even though he has danced
with her, he would not recognise her in her rags. I don't really like this
message for modern girls and I wanted to get away from this, so put the hunting
for Cinders into the ball scene, instead of having it after the ball.'
He
wrote back:
Editor:
'Now
that I see how important that moment is for you I wouldn’t suggest deleting it.
I do think it’s a great moment, and it really drives home the point that he’s
not interested in her for her fancy clothes. It sets up some lovely tension
early on, too. The believability of the recognition, or lack of, part of the
original story has always bothered me, so I feel happy to do away with it. And
I do like your solution of the Where’s Wally scene that will give kids
something to spot and also link back to the glass slipper element of the
original.'
We ended up with this:
The Fairytale Hairdresser and Cinderella is out his month
and I love the final version!
Now I just have to get on with plotting book 3, The
Fairytale Hairdresser and Sleeping Beauty.
Great post, Abie. It's lovely to see the progression of the book from ideas to final images - and your notes etc. Thank you for sharing them in so much detail.
ReplyDeleteThanks for highlighting the long process of crafting a picture book and the interaction between the writer, editor and illustrator that takes place before the book appears on the shelves. The Fairytale Hairdresser is such a brilliant idea - have fun with book 3!
ReplyDeleteThanks for this Abie. I loved seeing your process (and weirdly enough it's exactly how my picture books have been created). I've had a series idea knocking 'round in my mind for quite a while and so was keen to read your comments about the stories being able to fit in with previous and future plots.
ReplyDeleteHow interesting, Abie - it's great to see 'behind the scenes'. I notice you don't include the text with your thumbnails - just ideas of the general plots.
ReplyDeletePlus your discussion with the editor is revealing. A long time ago I wrote an early chapter book called 'Cinderella's Wedding' and I envisaged the horrid sisters being horrid but pretty (that's why I didn't call them 'ugly sisters'). In the illustrations they were really ugly which made for fun visual images that children enjoy, but I've always felt a little uncomfortable with that.
Everyone who is thinking of writing a picture book should read this. It's a great lesson in how much behind-the-scenes thought goes on.
ReplyDeleteAbie you are very brave sharing so much of the process. I don;t think I'd be brave enough to show my very first scribbles. I've never drawn out in rough the images for each page but do break down the story in a grid format. The images I carry in my head and can 'see' them as I read the words. Perhaps it is something I'll try next time.
ReplyDeleteWow! A thousand thank-yous for sharing this process!
ReplyDeleteAbie, this is a lovely post and I'll recommend it to people writing picture books (I'm doing a picture book evening class starting in just over a week's time). Like Paeony, I was interested to see you leaving the text out of the thumbnails. I guess they couldn't really be thumbnails with all the text but I try and get most of it in... next time, I'm going to try it your way. I think that would work well for me. (Have you tried using PowerPoint to do a really basic mockup of your book? Chitra Soundar recommends it. I'm planning to try that, too.) Great post. Thanks, Clare.
ReplyDeleteEnlightening and much food for thought as I start my new series with Random House. Ha! I think we share the same lovely editor!
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