This week, author, Lou Carter, has taken the Picture Book Den reins and is talking to us about minimal word count picture books. Lou is the author of 'Pirate Stew', illustrated by Nikki Dyson, and also 'There Is No Dragon In This Story', illustrated by Deborah Allwright, which has now been translated into a phenomenal 18 languages!! 'Oscar The Hungry Unicorn' is Lou and Nikki's next offering and we're lucky to have a sneak peek of it today! Thank you, Lou.
'When my agent suggested that I try to write a minimal word
count picture book I immediately thought, no way. Surely that would be
territory reserved only for author-illustrators. And would a publisher not
think I was just downright lazy? But then I got to work…
When I run picture book writing workshops in schools, one of
the most important things I try to get across is that you must let the pictures
tell some of the story. This sounds obvious I know, but I think it is all too
easy to write too much in the text and then have an illustration showing the
same information.
For example;
TEXT: One bright, sunny morning Rabbit put on her favourite
red hat and hopped off to the Carrot Cafe for breakfast.
ILLUSTRATION: A rabbit in a red hat hopping towards Carrot
Cafe, the sun shining in the sky.
In this example the text tells you everything you need to
know without the picture. Similarly the picture tells you everything you need
to know without the text. You would not glean any extra information from either
the words or the illustrations. Ideally, with this illustration the only text
needed would be something that Rabbit thinks or feels i.e. something we cannot
SEE.
For example;
TEXT: Rabbit was hungry!
or
TEXT: Rabbit couldn't wait for breakfast!
This skill is important for any length picture book but is
essential for minimal word texts.
In my opinion, Jon Klassen is the king of this genre, my
favourites being This Is Not My Hat and I Want My Hat Back. In both stories the
illustrations and text come together perfectly to tell simple yet highly
amusing stories.
So when I came to write Oscar The Hungry Unicorn I tried to
focus on these key principles;
1) story simplicity
(The Oscar storyline is that of a unicorn who eats
everything, including his stable, and simply tries to find somewhere else to
live.)
2) punchline pictures
(where the text will set up the joke for the illustration to
answer)
For instance, on this page neither the text nor the
illustration would be complete on their own. But together the text sets up the
joke by explaining that the ship has a hole in it and the picture provides the
punchline - Oscar has bitten the hole in it.
My first drafts of Oscar were in excess of 400 words (around
half that of my other picture books.) And although I was pleased with the early
versions I felt they could be funnier still.
It was my daughter in the end who
suggested that I “cut way more words”. Once I halved the word count again to
just under 200 words the story suddenly felt right and packed more of a punch.
Less is more, as they say.'
'Oscar the Hungry Unicorn' by Lou Carter and Nikki Dyson is out now and can be found in all good book shops and online!
